Wednesday 19 January 2011

Scaffold Text - se ce sound

In class we were refreshing our memories about how to use speech marks properly. If your text has speech in it, REMEMBER TO USE THEM, and to take a new line for every time a new person talks.

Sally’s distress

My selfless niece Sally announced last Saturday that she would do all the housework and give her stressed mum a rest. She went to Tesco and bought all the groceries including a choice of cereal and a recipe book. Her mum was impressed. The house was spotless. The windows glistened. Sally whistled and pranced about as she dusted the cobwebs from the ceiling. She thought her day was a success. Descending the steps she was distressed as she tripped over her careless bother’s science kit. What a disaster!!

14 comments:

Lucy said...

Sally's Holiday

Sally was very very bored! She asked her mum if they could go on holiday. Her mum said yes very excitidely. She had a choice of going to Egypt or Lanzorate. She made the choice of Egypt. When they got there they were very impressed. There was people whistling to each other from across the pool to play with their floats. It was a change of scenery for Sally. Their room was spotless!!!!! They were really impressed now. At breakfast the next morning she couldn't decide on what to have. Pan cakes or cereal. She had to chose cereal because it was her favourite. They both went home after a week.

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Hope you enjoyed my scaffold text!!!!!!!!!!!

Mr Gray said...

"Remember those speech marks," reminded Mr Gray.

NATHAN AND JAMES said...
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thomas said...

CEREAL



Cereal is a food you eat at breakfast and supper. You’ll see it at the shop when you get the groceries. You’ll also see it on the TV screen at home. There are a lot of choices to choose from like CoCo Pops, Weetabix, Rice Krispies, Special K, Cheerios and Shreddies. Eating cereal makes sense because it gives you energy and reduces stress and some are sensible with whole grain.

jakedoodle said...

Once upon a time there was a spotless girl called Whistle.She was a distress to her choices. She did not have one muscle in her arm, she was really, really weak. Her muscles only measured 2 centimetres wide. One day Whistle met a witch who said she could possess her and make her muscles bigger. She had to eat two ton of Special K cereal in order for it to work. After one week Whistle's arm was the size of a size of a cylinder and she was very, very happy.

swanly said...

THE PSYCHO GYPSEE
ONCE THERE WAS A PSYCHO GYPSEE CALLED SWANLY.SWANLY WAS A “BRILLIANT” MAN “really magnificent.”(I was being sarcastic).ONE DAY HE DESCENDED INTO HIS INGAGED FEONCEES SISTERS HOUSE WITH A POLICE WOMAN HOUSE TO SHOW OF HIS MAGNIFICENT MUCLES AND THE POWER TO POSSESS THE FORCE AND THE DARK SIDE.BUT ON THE DAY OF THE WEDDING 2 THINGS HAPPEND THAT SHOULDN’T HAVE, MARIEN(SWANLYS SOON TO BE WIFE) FOUND OUT THAT HE CHEATED ON HER SO SHE SLAPPED HIMAND THEN SWANLY ACSADENTLY LIFTED HER UP WITH THE FORCE AND CHOKED HER TO DEATH WITH THE DARK SIDE. THE NEXT WEEK SWANLY WENT TO COURT, CLAMED HE WAS INNOCENT,GOT SENTENSED TO 15 YEARS IN JAIL AND ACSADENTLY LIFTED THE JUDGE UP WITH THE FORCE AND CHOKED TO THE JUDGE DEATH WITH THE DARK SIDE!!!

joel said...

Once there was a man called Bob and he had the force. He liked to prance around the room and try to impress his neighbours with his cylinder shaped lightsaber. One day bob went to get some cereal in his groceries and he discovered he had a choice between coco pops or frosties. He went home to watch his favourite TV serial The Thistle and the Whistle which is about a spotless thistle who meets a whistle in some lovely scenery in the country side. When its over he has his tea.

Janet Gordon said...

STEPH'S BIRTHDAY!!

Once upon a time there was two friends called Steph and Sarah. It was coming up to Steph's birthday and Sarah was invited to her to her birthday. They had a choice whether to go ice-skating or the swimming pool. Steph asked her mum could they go ice skating and the swimming pool, she said "yes". It was Steph's birthday, they went swimming first then got some food then they went ice-skating. They said, "we had a good time."
THE END!

Megan The Ant... said...

The Census
There was a very posh couple who didn't want to be counted in the local census,so the lady went psycho and in her distress,she had a prance around the room. The couple flew in an aeroplane and as it was ascending she was very sensible,with no nonsense from her.As the aircraft made to descend,her husband told her they were going to a magnificent new house and it would really impress her. The lady arrived and noticed the scenery was beatuiful and the grass wasn't one centimetre too long but she did notice there was a thistle in the middle. The husband had no choice but to get it away. He went to get groceries while she checked that the house was spotless with brillant white ceilings. When her husband got back,she was munching on a bowl of cereal and watching the 60inch screen of her new tv. They then got really sentimental about moving, so they went back to their old house and joined the census...... The End....

Mr Gray said...

swanly, great story but you have loooooads of spelling mistakes. Can you fix it please?

Nathan & James, I didn't allow your comment to be posted as a) it didn't make sense and b) the topic wasn't right for our blog.
Have another go boys!

Lauren2 said...

THE SCHOOL PLAY
This is the story of a little girl called, Sasha; she starts her day like most of us do, with a bowl of cereal, then she washes her teeth and gets dressed for school.
When at school she was in a lot of stress because she had recently auditioned for the school play and they were due to announce the parts at breaktime. She impressed the teachers so much, they gave her the choice of 2 magnificent parts. She could either be very sensible or have no sense and prance around the stage.
Sasha was an innocent type of girl so she chose the sensible part. On the night of the play she played the part so well, everyone whistled and applauded.

HOLLY! said...

One day Mum said, "I'm sick of all this stress! Let's go for the groceries and get some new cereal."

The morning before Amy had went a bit psycho and flung her Sugar Puffs up on the ceiling. Luckily, Sam the dog was around and he made a magnificent job of making the floor spotless.

We went into Tesco and Mum announced, "We have to stop this nonsense and you have plenty of choice here in the cereal aisle, I want you to make sensible, healthy choices and not choose any of the sugary junk!" So they picked a healthy option.

The next morning worked out well and thankfully Sam the dog was NOT needed.

jack said...

The little psycho

Once there was a little girl called Lydia. Lydia keeps eating chocolate and when she eats too much she turns a psycho. She ate chocolate for breakfast, lunch, dinner and she wrecks her room and all of her toys are EVERY WHERE. She runs a round shouting she talks a load of nonsense she bangs the ceiling brakes the TV screen and breaks all the photo frames. After hours of wrecking she came in to the kitchen to her Mum and Dad to announce that she was going to be sensible from now on and said she was going to clean her room. A few hours later her Mum went to check on Lydia in her room she opened the door and her room was spotless and tidy like nothing had ever happened.

NATHAN!! SORRY SWANLEY YODA MAN!!THE ANNOYING ORANGE said...

YODA JR

YODA JR IS A THE DECENDED MASTER YODA.HE POSSESSES A MAGICAL FORCE CALLED CEREAL FORCE.HE WHISTLES WHILE HE PRANCES ROUND GETTING THE GROCERIES.ONE DAY HE WAS LOOKING AT THE GOOD SCENERY FROM HIS HOUSE WHEN YODA WAS SHOUTING WITH DISTRESS .HE RAN OVER TO YODA'S MAGNIFICENT HOUSE.[YODA LIVES ACROSS THE STREET]DARTH MAUL WAS IN WITH DARTH VADER AND GENERAL GREAVIOUS.THEY WERE FIGHTING YODA ,YODA JR SAVED YODA BY JUMPING INFRONT AND THE BADDIES JUMPED BACK.YODA JR USED THE CEREAL FORCE AND TURNED THEM INTO CEREAL. WOOOO!!!!YODA JR ACENDED TO YODA'S APPRENTICE.

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